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Post by edwardjohn on Aug 23, 2022 21:11:50 GMT
ITS NOT FRANKENSTEIN ... ITS FRANKENSTEIN!
You're a legend if you know what this is from.  
Man ... I really do miss Gene Wilder ... |
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Post by docpain2 on Aug 24, 2022 11:29:41 GMT
Hmmm....isn't WONDRFUL how most names have SO many variations in other languages.
Francisco
Francesco
Francois
Frankenfurter
Frankenberry
osnafrank
FRANK!? 😜
"Ohhhh....
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You're a legend if you know what this is from.
Igor: You take the blonde, I'll take the one in the toiben.
Dr. Frederick Frankenstein: I was talking about the luggage. |
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 14:51:38 GMT
Good morning from here, everyone.
The prologue is now posted,
and I can't wait to see what JB darkharbinger
comes up with next! 
The title I came up with :
"The Deadly"
is just one suggestion.
Looking forward to what you
other authors come up with! 
I have looked around and found a base image
we can use for our Story Cover.
(I'm no where as good with this computer stuff as diobolic Dio.)
I've just started to make adjustments
and embellishments to it.
I will dress it up some more.
I think 'gristly gray' and 'neon goo green'
are a pretty good ZOMBIE color combination for Halloween.
Everyone please let me know what you think about it,
should I continue with this pic?.....
Tanith
prufrock21
docpain2
edwardjohn
Thank you.
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Post by edwardjohn on Aug 24, 2022 14:52:47 GMT
ITS NOT FRANKENSTEIN ... ITS FRANKENSTEIN!
You're a legend if you know what this is from.
Igor: You take the blonde, I'll take the one in the toiben.
Dr. Frederick Frankenstein: I was talking about the luggage. |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 18:18:52 GMT
Wolf-buddy, in general the Prologue is good, but not great yet. It reads more like a Prologue and Chapter 1. I prefer Prologues short so that they function as a teaser. Consider the following arrangement.
The Deadly [title doesn’t grab me, consider: Resurgence Force: A Zombie Apocalypse]
Prologue
Traxim Research Laboratory
Undisclosed Location, Eastern Europe
The night of 'the incident'.
The lab was a complete disaster. Strewn with dead technicians and assistants, that were shredded and partially devoured. Equipment was either destroyed or left popping explosively and sizzling in flaming mechanical death throes. Blood, other liquids organic and inorganic sickly slickened the floors and walls. Materials, tools and paperwork were scattered everywhere.
The reanimated 'supermen' they [the scientist] had created had gotten loose and broke out the lab. They were wandering somewhere in the building. The men who were in charge and responsible for it all coming about were safely behind a thick bullet proof glass wall of the observatory section of the lab. Shock, awe and horror scored their drawn, exhausted faces and tears filled their eyes....
The sentinel onlookers.
Safely concealed from sentries and cameras, in a magickly conjured low lying cloud of cover fog, the witches Magda Cruxtabel and Cyrus Lavenkrept levitated and observed as well. Their vantage point, an upper window of the facility's laboratory. For over a month Cyrus, being especially gifted with 'second and third sight', had been getting mental flashes of events leading up that night's events. Cyrus had seen the name 'Traxim' and a document entitled 'Resurgence Force' in his visions, but he could not clearly see everything exactly, nor pinpoint the location. Gifted as he and Magda were, they did sometimes need help from outsiders. He had conferred with Magda and acquired assistance from a trusted private investigator friend to find the facility. He and Magda were both particularly disturbed by the term 'Resurgence Force'. "Resurgence" being one of the 7 wonders of sorcery. And neither of them believed in mere coincidences of any kind.
[Here you might want to bring in the info about Traxim Research and then continue with the characters, the dialogue and the rest of the story. The characters are très cool, by the way, and really stand out. Oddly the initial incident reminds me of Resident Evil.]
Just my initial thoughts which I hope are helpful.
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Post by darkharbinger on Aug 24, 2022 18:34:47 GMT
Looks like I am up to bat. I'm on it.
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 18:36:56 GMT
Commander osnafrank and edwardjohn ,
your assistance here would be appreciated.
prufrock21 has accidentally posted in the Chapter's thread. 🙂
Frank will you please move it here,
I can't seem to find the hidden thread titles, when moderating.
Pruf, I will read your post in a moment.
Thank you for commenting, buddy. 😊 
All Writer's, please be sure to read the above post in white font.
Thank you. 🙂
diobolic
darkharbinger
Tanith
docpain2
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 18:38:26 GMT
Looks like I am up to bat. I'm on it.  WUITIIQGUyMrvFxIgkNw You're gonna knock us out JB!  |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 18:38:59 GMT
My mistake, wolf-buddy. Sorry. p21
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 18:40:34 GMT
My mistake, wolf-buddy. Sorry. p21 |
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 18:52:09 GMT
Wolf-buddy, in general the Prologue is good, but not great yet. It reads more like a Prologue and Chapter 1. I prefer Prologues short so that they function as a teaser. Consider the following arrangement. The Deadly [title doesn’t grab me, consider: Resurgence Force: A Zombie Apocalypse] Prologue Traxim Research Laboratory Undisclosed Location, Eastern Europe The night of 'the incident'. The lab was a complete disaster. Strewn with dead technicians and assistants, that were shredded and partially devoured. Equipment was either destroyed or left popping explosively and sizzling in flaming mechanical death throes. Blood, other liquids organic and inorganic sickly slickened the floors and walls. Materials, tools and paperwork were scattered everywhere. The reanimated 'supermen' they [the scientist] had created had gotten loose and broke out the lab. They were wandering somewhere in the building. The men who were in charge and responsible for it all coming about were safely behind a thick bullet proof glass wall of the observatory section of the lab. Shock, awe and horror scored their drawn, exhausted faces and tears filled their eyes.... The sentinel onlookers. Safely concealed from sentries and cameras, in a magickly conjured low lying cloud of cover fog, the witches Magda Cruxtabel and Cyrus Lavenkrept levitated and observed as well. Their vantage point, an upper window of the facility's laboratory. For over a month Cyrus, being especially gifted with 'second and third sight', had been getting mental flashes of events leading up that night's events. Cyrus had seen the name 'Traxim' and a document entitled 'Resurgence Force' in his visions, but he could not clearly see everything exactly, nor pinpoint the location. Gifted as he and Magda were, they did sometimes need help from outsiders. He had conferred with Magda and acquired assistance from a trusted private investigator friend to find the facility. He and Magda were both particularly disturbed by the term 'Resurgence Force'. "Resurgence" being one of the 7 wonders of sorcery. And neither of them believed in mere coincidences of any kind. [Here you might want to bring in the info about Traxim Research and then continue with the characters, the dialogue and the rest of the story. The characters are très cool, by the way, and really stand out. Oddly the initial incident reminds me of Resident Evil.] Just my initial thoughts which I hope are helpful.
you are a far better and more experienced writer than I am.
It is done, and I am happy with it, I think it's clearly the U.S.
and I like "The Deadly" as my title suggestion,
because I prefer shorter titles and it is a bit of a double entendre.
Lol, alot of what you got in your post, you'll have to take up with our Edinator edwardjohn ,
he's runnin' the show and has approved the word count and all. |
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 19:00:47 GMT
Wolf-buddy, in general the Prologue is good, but not great yet. It reads more like a Prologue and Chapter 1. I prefer Prologues short so that they function as a teaser. Consider the following arrangement. The Deadly [title doesn’t grab me, consider: Resurgence Force: A Zombie Apocalypse] Prologue Traxim Research Laboratory Undisclosed Location, Eastern Europe The night of 'the incident'. The lab was a complete disaster. Strewn with dead technicians and assistants, that were shredded and partially devoured. Equipment was either destroyed or left popping explosively and sizzling in flaming mechanical death throes. Blood, other liquids organic and inorganic sickly slickened the floors and walls. Materials, tools and paperwork were scattered everywhere. The reanimated 'supermen' they [the scientist] had created had gotten loose and broke out the lab. They were wandering somewhere in the building. The men who were in charge and responsible for it all coming about were safely behind a thick bullet proof glass wall of the observatory section of the lab. Shock, awe and horror scored their drawn, exhausted faces and tears filled their eyes.... The sentinel onlookers. Safely concealed from sentries and cameras, in a magickly conjured low lying cloud of cover fog, the witches Magda Cruxtabel and Cyrus Lavenkrept levitated and observed as well. Their vantage point, an upper window of the facility's laboratory. For over a month Cyrus, being especially gifted with 'second and third sight', had been getting mental flashes of events leading up that night's events. Cyrus had seen the name 'Traxim' and a document entitled 'Resurgence Force' in his visions, but he could not clearly see everything exactly, nor pinpoint the location. Gifted as he and Magda were, they did sometimes need help from outsiders. He had conferred with Magda and acquired assistance from a trusted private investigator friend to find the facility. He and Magda were both particularly disturbed by the term 'Resurgence Force'. "Resurgence" being one of the 7 wonders of sorcery. And neither of them believed in mere coincidences of any kind. [Here you might want to bring in the info about Traxim Research and then continue with the characters, the dialogue and the rest of the story. The characters are très cool, by the way, and really stand out. Oddly the initial incident reminds me of Resident Evil.] Just my initial thoughts which I hope are helpful. |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 19:02:09 GMT
No problema, wolf-buddy. You did well. As for the picture, I would prefer to see a really grungy-looking zombie, in a classic zombie pose. Thanks for listening.
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 19:06:32 GMT
No problema, wolf-buddy. You did well. As for the picture, I would prefer to see a really grungy-looking zombie, in a classic zombie pose. Thanks for listening.
But since we have a 'mixed genre sci-fi and horror' theme...I thought this pic might be good and not give too much of the story away to readers.
Happy to hear you opinion and hope others weigh in too. |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 19:09:33 GMT
Good point, wolf-buddy. But please let's emphasize the zombie element.
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 19:15:06 GMT
No problema, wolf-buddy. You did well. As for the picture, I would prefer to see a really grungy-looking zombie, in a classic zombie pose. Thanks for listening.
But since we have a 'mixed genre sci-fi and horror' theme...I thought this pic might be good and not give too much of the story away to readers.
Happy to hear you opinion and hope others weigh in too.
It might just be an outbreak. 😄
We'll see what our writer's surprise us with, mes amies! |
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 19:16:00 GMT
Good point, wolf-buddy. But please let's emphasize the zombie element. |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 19:21:50 GMT
A Zombie Apocalypse Outbreak, or Outbreak: A Zombie Apocalypse. Sounds intriguing.  |
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Post by wolf on Aug 24, 2022 19:27:23 GMT
A Zombie Apocalypse Outbreak, or Outbreak: A Zombie Apocalypse. Sounds intriguing.
I'll keep up with your ideas, if he wants me to compile a list. I like what you've got. |
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Post by prufrock21 on Aug 24, 2022 19:30:41 GMT
Agreed. Let's brainstorm a slew of titles, meaning many.
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WUITIIQGUyMrvFxIgkNw You're gonna knock us out JB! 
